Final Script

WE FIXED OUR SCRIPT!
remember the 5 page long script the person reading this probably skipped over? Now we have a two page script you can skip over!
Being two pages long will actually let us fit what we want to convey into the time allotted for our introduction. It also removed unnecessary things that did not fit into our plot.
Speaking of plot, this new script is centered around the plot we thought up and is a lot better because we actually knew where we were going with this one.
Without further a-do:

This script is the clear winner between the two.
Although Ricardo and I cannot definitely say that this will be the final script, we don't see any reason to change it.
The putting the boxes in the closet scene is such a crucial part to the story, however, that in the final product more emphasis and care will be applied.
This script is a lot better in representing our character, along with cutting to the chase. We show exactly the character, plot, problem, everything!
I think its pretty close to perfect.
It foreshadows a lot more of the movie and is overall more feasible to film. It also is very clear how writing out the entire plot focused and improved our introduction.
One thing I may change is instead of Trevor actually using the toilet, he would just sit on it and smoke, fully clothed. This is to a) make it slightly more PG-13 and avoid awkward editing, cuts, or shots, b) keep it true to the 70s when you never saw someone without a cigarette in their mouth and c) imply that he is nervous. Since cigarettes are infamous for calming people down, Trevor smoking one would imply its not easy for him to kill. We would have to find fake cigarettes that produce real smoke, though. No smoking allowed.
See you next time!

We planned out an entire movie for a two-minute intro

Yes, I know this is just an intro.

Yes, Ricardo and I planned the entire movie anyways.

Initially, only the plot of the movie was drafted, scripted, and thought out. However, this brought up many,
many problems.We had no idea where our intro was going and we had to idea what to make our
character do, since we didn't even know who he was. Since we had no end goal, and the character had
no story, it was hard to write with a purpose. In creating the entire plot, we were able to make our
introduction more authentic and make it better.

Movie introductions are usually made to hint at the rest of the plot, and many hide "easter eggs" that
relate to the entire movie later on. Therefore, we would not be able to make this introduction without
writing out the entire story.

Without further a-do, here is our story:

Set in the 70s, our main character, Trevor Mazzanti works as a projectionist for his local cinema. He
usually overlooks romance movies and loves to fantasize about his life as a main character in a romance
film. However, he is unable to attain love. We realize he is a pacifist, and heavily opposes the Vietnam
War. He is dating a politician's daughter, and the politician unfortunately approves of the war. However,
this does not create much of a problem with Trevor.

Trevor, whenever he has a victim, cherishes them. He is kind towards them and resents killing them. He
tries to calm and soothe them, acting as a loving figure. Once he does kill them, due to frustration of his
victims not returning the love he believes he feels, he keeps boxes full of "memories" of his victims. Each
box has photos, teeth, hair, and other gross stuff you would never want to find in a box.

After he kills the politician's daughter, he is caught, and goes to trial.

With this plot in mind, Ricardo and I have scripted a great introduction.

Our initial script

Ok Sooooooooo WE MADE A SCRIPT! 

Its really long, therefore it has to be cut down. However, it is a start! 

Ricardo wrote most of this script because he has more experience in screenwriting. However, I looked it over and contributed a lot to this. Ricardo often gets carried away with writing, and writes WAAAAAYYYYY more than he should. However, its better to cut than to have to add. 

This script that we have would probably translate to approximately 5 minutes screen time. Ricardo and I are working on a new, improved, shorter script. 

Anyways, here is the original script:

Apart from it being lengthy, this script strays from the Trevor Ricardo and I want to portray. This character is strange and creepy, borderline psychotic. The whole purpose of making Trevor the way we planned was to make the audience almost sympathize with him. The audience couldn't do that to someone who pretends to murder a mannequin. 

After much discussing, we also believed that the introduction should take less of a focus with his next victim (in this case, his neighbor, which we also changed), and focus more on Trevor. We had to make it seem like these murders weren't planned, they were bumps in the relationship. Therefore, this script was unusable unless we changed our entire movie. 

Now that we know our direction now, though, expect an awesome script by the next post.

See you soon!

Meet Trevor, Your Friendly Neighborhood Serial Killer

Who exactly is Trevor Mazzanti?
Good question.
Heavily inspired by the movie Taxi Driver, Trevor is an interesting character.
The main character of Taxi Driver, Travis Bickle, plans on "cleaning up the streets of New York". He plans, and kills, people that make New York "dirty". Basically, anyone who he doesn't deem fit to live in the city.
Although our character, Trevor, does not have the same intent, he is still based off of Travis (catch the similarity in the names, anyone?). He believes that people need to fit into the picture of perfect romance movies, and if they can't play the part, well then..... yikes.
Trevor doesn't have malicious intent, however. It is his mind that's all twisted and messed up.
As stated a couple of posts ago, Trevor is a lonely projectionist who mainly runs romance movies. He wants to live his life like one, but unrealistic to any human being on earth, he cannot come to terms with the fact that he cannot.
This love translates to him being unusually caring and comforting to his victims before he kills them. Its the only way he can be as caring and kind as a lead man, and maybe this will win him the love of his life.
The 30 year old keeps boxes full of "memories" of his victims, because he still quite loves them, in his own twisted way.
The audience is made to pity and sympathize with Trevor, which is what makes the movie so great. Usually, people don't look at a serial killer and think "awww poor guy". It makes the audience question their thoughts and moral compass. That is what we hope to convey through Trevor.